After Chaos: Commentaries

[Gorthank]

Memmon found what he was looking for in the market, a rusty old mountain bike that was functional, and a couple flowers

Why do I have the feeling his next action would be to give them to Gabriella?

[Shani]

Jul 31, 2010 12:44:34 GMT -5 Gorthank said:

Memmon found what he was looking for in the market, a rusty old mountain bike that was functional, and a couple flowers

Why do I have the feeling his next action would be to give them to Gabriella?

Cause it's predictable like that?

[Benny the Bear]

Commentary time!

"We are also interested," Gabriella said, raising her hand.

"Hey there, lovebirds," were the first words that flew out of her mouth. "Let's make this quick: What are you two good at?" she asked skeptically, looking them up and down.

"I am Memmon, and I am good with just about any gun, especially this shotgun here. I can make exotic ammunition." he says with a wry smile.

"I am Gabriella, and I'm not bad with my pistol, and have experience scavenging, mostly in port cities and old abandoned ships. I also have a mutation that allows me to give direct orders to animals, be it to stop their attack or to find something of value. This is easier with pack and hive animals, and the larger the animal is the harder it is for me to control them. Still, I can deter wild dogs and those sorts of things, and even use them to my advantage if need-be."

Huh? wait, what? ... So first Damsel uses the extremely informal word "we" when refering to herself and Shady dude, something usually done by people when they have known each other long enough or by family (and they just met).
And then Mirka calls them "lovebirds" and they don't react at all, where one would normally try to deny it, or feel awkward, or even if they had a relationship, it would still feel awkward at least...
You guys should realize that after this, Mirka is going to fully assume they're related, right?

It was a joy to see that some people still had a sense of humor in this dull, spiritless world.

Ouch! and I thought quite a few people here have a sense of humor

Say, is it just me or do the twins make anyone think of a clock? I think this style of writing should be called Tick-Tock-Text!

"I don't have a ride." admits the man with the nose. "May I purchase a seat upon yours?" He holds out a gold coin.

Hmm, that's not gonna roll smoothly with Mirka, gold coin or not... wait, gold?

"How does four pieces of silver sound?" ... four silver pieces ... "Four pieces is a good price." ... four silver pieces ...

Hold on a tick, when did we go from caps to coins? Also, what's with the Agatha Christie mind tricks? It's enough to let us know it's four peices the first or maybe second time.

"I need to see a man about a horse and cart."

Poor horse!

[jeanetteisabelle]

Aug 5, 2010 8:38:07 GMT -5 Benny the Bear said:

Hold on a tick, when did we go from caps to coins?

We have been using coins since the beginning of the game.

Jul 21, 2010 19:24:38 GMT -5 jeanetteisabelle said:

She pays with the last of the coins she has. . . .

Jeanette Isabelle

[The Nobody]

Aug 10, 2010 15:29:37 GMT -5 jeanetteisabelle said:

Player: Arik

Deputy Pointer is back on the radio. "Beautiful Mind, this is Deputy Pointer. Do you read me? Over."

You might question the validity of this update, saying that Jeanette isn't in the official list of people who update the forums. She's not, but the update is valid. Because she asked politely, and everyone else was busy.

As for the Arik's post... I won't ask why is a deputy using the security band to call his wife. And if he's not using the same band, I won't ask why then is he the only one smart enough to change the bands at all. These points are minor and don't concern the GM, so they shouldn't concern you either.

What does concern the GM, though...

Aug 10, 2010 15:29:37 GMT -5 jeanetteisabelle said:

"A woman was shot from a building and her companion fired back. I don't know how the shooter is doing but the woman was screaming about how she does not want to see the doctor. Over."

Wasn't the clinic supposed to be some distance from the market? Wasn't Angel supposed to be a person that NEVER screams, especially anything longer then "no"? Doesn't this make Hikaru's reply doubly impossible?

If you decide to reference Vap's post to describe that Kawako got to the clinic very fast, please, keep in mind that this post doesn't state unambiguously that she got there fast. In fact, I believe that Sinclair's post (in which Angel screamed) did not pick up immediately after the previous post of that storyline for exactly this reason - to hint that the clinic was some distance away. If you still insist that Hikaru's reply was possible and/or logical, please, ponder on this question:

Is it really neccessary, or even polite, to make your character directly or indirectly aware of certain parts of the plot if they aren't involved in those parts?

[jeanetteisabelle]

Arik's latest post has been updated.

Jeanette Isabelle

[jeanetteisabelle]

Aug 24, 2010 14:49:36 GMT -5 Vap said:

Kawako digs back into her pockets, pulling out a few individual 2x4 medical gauze and what appeared to be two travel size painkillers.

Present day medical gear in her pockets? What other liberties are allowed in this ruined world?

Jeanette Isabelle

[The Nobody]

Fabric can be made in the setting. Cotton or not, I believe it can be rolled into "2x4 gauze". Painkillers, in one way or another, can be produced from herbs. It's not neccessary to assume something is "present day" if it can be explained within the setting.

As for your question:

What liberties are allowed? Anything that falls into the categories of Visual Effect, Handy Trinket, Plot Point or Dramatic Emphasis. At other times too, on players discretion, but very sparingly. Be carefull about Mary Sue and anything that would make the problem TOO easy.

In case you wanted to ask "What Advanced technology and/or items are allowed?", here's an answer to that, too. Mostly, personal items. Sometimes, a profession-related item. Anything that would (or could) affect the plot or Player-NPC relationships must be approved by the GM first.

If need be, I can give some examples.

[The Nobody]

Ladies and gentlemen, I'd like to move to the evening of story-day 1. Please, round up your current plot activities and report when you're ready.

[The Enemy]

I am sorry, but I have had a talk with Lifon. He is no longer interested in the RP, and since my char can't really do anything without his, Memmon has to leave as well.

I may very well want to enter with a new character, though, if that would be allowed.

[The Nobody]

That is allowed.

I wonder if you can get Lifon's permission to play Gabriella. After all, your characters have already recruited for Yura's Traders.

If not, I'll work it out with Benny an Shani.

[The Enemy]

Well, Memmon and Gabriella will be leaving the RP, maybe they can simply have second thoughts and leave before the evening. But I will not be on to respond for 3-4 days, will not have net. So we can assume that is what happens? Have a wonderful day.

[The Enemy]

Talked it over with Shani, just going to say that Memmon had a argument with the leaders of the group, and left because of that. I have one character for myself in the pipeline, and perhaps three more people from my forum will join as well :3

Take a look at the intro RP for it here: s8.zetaboards.com/Webcomic_RP_Central/topic/8239494/1/#new

And the characters here: s8.zetaboards.com/Webcomic_RP_Central/topic/8209438/1/#new

[jeanetteisabelle]

If anyone has any ideas for an orphanage for mutants, let me know. Though I have already started on it, I did not give it much thought in its potential. There may very well be potential here for story telling. Several residents and a few characteristics of the place have already been established.

Jeanette Isabelle

[The Nobody]

[GM says]

Ladies and gentlemen, I'd like to reassure you that this RP is not dead, merely delayed. We are currently waiting for the Yura's Traders' move. Unfortunately, both players responsible for these characters are working hard to reach the deadline.

I don't know this deadline, but I presume it to be around Christmas. So, a little patience and we'll be back into action.

Meanwhile, I will not be online for about a week starting today, maybe more. Write PMs or e-mails.

Regards!

[/GM says]