Post by Benny the Bear on Jul 27, 2010 10:40:40 GMT -5
So I've been itching for a while to get a thread like this started, similar to the HE commentaries, a 100% OOC thread where people can get help and recommendations on how to progress the story further, musings on what has happened or to coordinate the story better. (by "coordinate" I mean the opposite of a "cluster fuck" which I'll explain later)
To start off, I'm going to make a break-down of what has happened so far (5 pages into the RP now) from the beggining, and try to sort some stuff out that had me raising my eyebrows, and perhaps those of other people too. (and just to show how funny quoting out of context is)
Oh, don't worry, someshit trouble is going down pretty soon.
Firstly, I present to you, a play:
Shady Dude: Memmon, from here on to be known as "Shady Dude" was walking through the market doing nothing in particular. how exciting.
Damsel: Gabriella, from here on to be known as "Damsel", "meandered through the market", also doing nothing in particular. Something tells me these two are gonna get along.
Damsel: "Hey there bycicle man! I be needing a job! be a sweetheart!"
Shady Dude: "I'm not from this town, yo. Jus a shady wanderer who scavenges things."
Damsel: "Hey, those nice people over there are offering jobs and adventure! Maybe I should go look? I'm sooo lonely after all my seafaring, lol!" "Oh, and what's your name shady-looking man?"
Shady Dude: "Naw, I'm just Shady Dude, but those junkies over there are even shadier than me, let's hit em up later."
Damsel: "Omg, they ARE shadier than you! I must follow you completely, then!"
Shady Dude: "yo, this tool ripped me off here, but whatever, what's your name doll?"
Damsel: "My name is Damsel Dame lolololol!" "Let me give you a backrub whilst I enquire about your scavengy escapades!"
Shady Dude: "Yeah I do all dat shit, wandering round the world like it's my home, no real hurry to do shit, just keepin it REAL" "Anyways, how'd you like me to be your guide to a place I don't know?"
Damsel: "OMG, yes! I don't know you, and you don't know much, but it's better than not knowing anything all by my lonesome"
Shady Dude: "So ya need anything before we go? Cause got all I need riiight here" ooh yeah I'ma gettin' lai--oh shit dude, I can't think that far ahead!
Damsel: "Nah, I just wanted to find a way to survive, and I'll probably survive with you, rite?
Shady Dude: "So lets go check these coke dealers out, they have an imaginary stage and a mutant is getting up on it"
Damsel: "Let's"
Shady Dude: "Now dat's what I'm talking about!"
Damsel: "What a nice but shady traveling partner! I was getting lonely!" (dayum!)
I could've made proper breakdowns here, but presenting it as such is probably very funny as it is, mainly because it's true.
But let's double back a little and see what was happening in the mean time.
Did somebody say weeaboo?
Convenient plot device, natch.
LoL, snaffle, I find that word funny for some reason.
Typical day in the middle east.
Oh, come on, kitsune?! wapanese #2
This part reminds me to make a list of all the action movies where this situation was used.
Damn, these kids need to be locked up yo!
Pedophelia foiled by firearms! more kids should carry guns.
Looks like me and Gorthank think alike!
Actually, I'm kinda worried for the big-nose man now.
There is, of course, the minor detail that the water is irradiated and the fish will probably eat you first, but what the hell, rite?
Wow, is this guy a seasoned child molester or what?
Sushi resteraunt? yay for fish that have stopped flopping!
Wow, I couldn't've come up with a better name for a creepy pedo myself!
And have big Soviet party, that crush the capitalist regime!
Did anyone else find Mikan's post totally epic? I know I did!
Yes, please. The more people of today think that bottle caps will be the currency of thewasteland future, the more my bottle cap collection goes up in value.
Hmm, well, I guess that's enough for that, now it's time for some de-cluster fucking.
See, right now me and Shani have to make our next posts for the RP but there are a number of problems, that add to the greater problem of "what the hell do we do next?"
1. Kawako wants to join Yura's traders.
2. Someone just got shot, so you might expect there to be some panic at first but then--
3. "Padre is using his Empathy to put the crowd under control", therefore our characters must react somehow.
4. The sheriff's lacky, Bill, is expected to be RP'd by me and Shani, and was supposed to get our characters to go meet the sheriff, but there is a lotta shit going down!
5. Shady Dude and Damsel are also approaching the traders, possibly requiring interaction from us.
6. Nathaniel didn't particularly recognise Yura, but Yura might. More potential interaction required.
Now, The Nobody's thing with the sheriff was a neat idea, but now there is just too much stuff going on. Can we have one story arc at a time, please?
P.S. What is this imaginary stage that Yura & Mirka were on? They took turns standing on the hood of the truck last I remember....
To start off, I'm going to make a break-down of what has happened so far (5 pages into the RP now) from the beggining, and try to sort some stuff out that had me raising my eyebrows, and perhaps those of other people too. (and just to show how funny quoting out of context is)
I can't post a good narrative description of anything yet, so just mill around for a little. Explain how your character got there, or why do they need to get out of there. Make friends or money, get into trouble and just have fun.
Oh, don't worry, some
Firstly, I present to you, a play:
Shady Dude: Memmon, from here on to be known as "Shady Dude" was walking through the market doing nothing in particular. how exciting.
Damsel: Gabriella, from here on to be known as "Damsel", "meandered through the market", also doing nothing in particular. Something tells me these two are gonna get along.
Damsel: "Hey there bycicle man! I be needing a job! be a sweetheart!"
Shady Dude: "I'm not from this town, yo. Jus a shady wanderer who scavenges things."
Damsel: "Hey, those nice people over there are offering jobs and adventure! Maybe I should go look? I'm sooo lonely after all my seafaring, lol!" "Oh, and what's your name shady-looking man?"
Shady Dude: "Naw, I'm just Shady Dude, but those junkies over there are even shadier than me, let's hit em up later."
Damsel: "Omg, they ARE shadier than you! I must follow you completely, then!"
Shady Dude: "yo, this tool ripped me off here, but whatever, what's your name doll?"
Damsel: "My name is Damsel Dame lolololol!" "Let me give you a backrub whilst I enquire about your scavengy escapades!"
Shady Dude: "Yeah I do all dat shit, wandering round the world like it's my home, no real hurry to do shit, just keepin it REAL" "Anyways, how'd you like me to be your guide to a place I don't know?"
Damsel: "OMG, yes! I don't know you, and you don't know much, but it's better than not knowing anything all by my lonesome"
Shady Dude: "So ya need anything before we go? Cause got all I need riiight here" ooh yeah I'ma gettin' lai--oh shit dude, I can't think that far ahead!
Damsel: "Nah, I just wanted to find a way to survive, and I'll probably survive with you, rite?
Shady Dude: "So lets go check these coke dealers out, they have an imaginary stage and a mutant is getting up on it"
Damsel: "Let's"
Shady Dude: "Now dat's what I'm talking about!"
Damsel: "What a nice but shady traveling partner! I was getting lonely!" (dayum!)
I could've made proper breakdowns here, but presenting it as such is probably very funny as it is, mainly because it's true.
But let's double back a little and see what was happening in the mean time.
Chihiro (a twelve-year-old Japanese girl) ... (written in Japanese) ... Renmei Temple ... in Japanese ... Having spent most of her life in Japan, Chihiro thanked the man with a bow.
Did somebody say weeaboo?
The trader took notice and responded with hand signals. "How did you know our language?"
Convenient plot device, natch.
It was later said that he came from the north, through the Airport Gate. The man was walking, guiding a horse by the snaffle.
LoL, snaffle, I find that word funny for some reason.
On the horse sat a figure that someone would identify as a woman, if only they could see her clearly. She was wrapped in a grey longcoat with a hood that she kept up at all times. The only thing visible from under that attire was a pair of light white boots, seemingly out of place in the harsh desert that was the surrounding area. She looked around as if fearful some monster would jump out of the shadows of a side street.
Typical day in the middle east.
Player: GUUKAN KITSUNE
Oh, come on, kitsune?! wapanese #2
"That there rifle will make me good tradin' over yonder in Charleston, kid. Hand it over, or I'll shoot ya full o' lead!"
Leo turns around and smiles a very thin, creepy smile at him. He doesn't respond.
"I'm not kidding!" the scruffy bandit growls. "Give me the blasted gun! I will shoot you!"
Leo keeps grinning, and the man starts to shake. "Why the hack are yah smilin' like that fer! yer gonna be shot!"
Leo shakes his head. "I won't be..." he starts.
Leo turns around and smiles a very thin, creepy smile at him. He doesn't respond.
"I'm not kidding!" the scruffy bandit growls. "Give me the blasted gun! I will shoot you!"
Leo keeps grinning, and the man starts to shake. "Why the hack are yah smilin' like that fer! yer gonna be shot!"
Leo shakes his head. "I won't be..." he starts.
This part reminds me to make a list of all the action movies where this situation was used.
Both of them start giggling as Lea takes his gun and finds it has a full clip and a chambered round.
Damn, these kids need to be locked up yo!
A pale man with a large nose wanders through the market place, keeping a careful lookout. He notices the Twins, and watches them for a few minutes. It's odd that such young people should be so clearly separated from their parents, and they're pretty heavily armed, too...
Pedophelia foiled by firearms! more kids should carry guns.
Noises came from the outside, the window, an man was speaking out loud. She curiously stood up, and stepped towards the window in an slow fluid controlled move. She moved the curtain of the window an inch aside peeking outside she saw an man closing by fast to two children. Was he planning something dirty? Angel looked back to her longcoat, it was wrapped around her longbow. She resisted taking it and decided to watch the scene further, peeking out of the window again, calm and silent.
Looks like me and Gorthank think alike!
Leo and Lea glance at one another, then look back at the strange man and smile their creepy smiles.
Actually, I'm kinda worried for the big-nose man now.
Chihiro approaches the twins. "Please forgive me." She says with a Japanese accent as she bows. "I heard the two of you mentioning your need for rations. There is a river, with fish, which runs through this settlement."
There is, of course, the minor detail that the water is irradiated and the fish will probably eat you first, but what the hell, rite?
"What, just the two of you?" asks the Man with the Nose. "Nobody else?" He doesn't ask where their parents are, but glances around, just in case he can spot them (naturally, he can't).
Wow, is this guy a seasoned child molester or what?
Instead of catching dinner, she presents them with another offer. "If you ever wish to settle down, I know of a place."
Sushi resteraunt? yay for fish that have stopped flopping!
My name's Alfred, by the way. Alfred Spangler.
Wow, I couldn't've come up with a better name for a creepy pedo myself!
Meaning Yura hasn't quite turned 40 yet, then. =P Will be fun to RP that.
And have big Soviet party, that crush the capitalist regime!
His smile washed away, but his eyes still showing a bright glimmer of hope, he took a brisker step in the direction of the market. The streets kept filling with souls stranger than the last, mutants, foreigners, airships huffing overhead like large, living beasts. Maybe here he would finally meet a seafarer like himself.
Did anyone else find Mikan's post totally epic? I know I did!
"That would be five caps"
Yes, please. The more people of today think that bottle caps will be the currency of the
Hmm, well, I guess that's enough for that, now it's time for some de-cluster fucking.
See, right now me and Shani have to make our next posts for the RP but there are a number of problems, that add to the greater problem of "what the hell do we do next?"
1. Kawako wants to join Yura's traders.
2. Someone just got shot, so you might expect there to be some panic at first but then--
3. "Padre is using his Empathy to put the crowd under control", therefore our characters must react somehow.
4. The sheriff's lacky, Bill, is expected to be RP'd by me and Shani, and was supposed to get our characters to go meet the sheriff, but there is a lotta shit going down!
5. Shady Dude and Damsel are also approaching the traders, possibly requiring interaction from us.
6. Nathaniel didn't particularly recognise Yura, but Yura might. More potential interaction required.
Now, The Nobody's thing with the sheriff was a neat idea, but now there is just too much stuff going on. Can we have one story arc at a time, please?
P.S. What is this imaginary stage that Yura & Mirka were on? They took turns standing on the hood of the truck last I remember....